He said without words,
as he glanced against the shore,
You left me drowning.
What do you imply by ‘glanced against the shore?’
Since the haiku is so short, I was trying to convey the image of him glancing out across the waters. So, he’s “glancing against the shore” in the sense that as it crashes toward him he looks above and beyond it.
Well thought out.
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